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Love that Poetry September 8, 2008

So much depends on….

my clock

my clock

My clock

So much depends upon my clock.
This device keeps me on track.
With it’s loud beeps, it wakes me up.

My clock (revised)

So much depends upon my clock.
It’s green numbers light up my room.
This helps keep me on time.
When it is time to get up,
It never fails with it’s loud obnoxious beeps.

my ipod

my ipod

My ipod

So much depends upon my ipod.
It contains my favorite music
That can cheer me up.

My ipod (revised)

So much depends upon my ipod.
It’s pink coloring
Shimmers in the light.
It contains my favorite music
Which, can cheer me up
Anytime.

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4 Responses to “Love that Poetry”

  1. fryeem Says:

    Ohh…I cannot wait to see what you will say about these two very important items. 🙂
    dr. frye

  2. Kasey Yow Says:

    I must say.. I really enjoyed reading your revised poems. I could tell that once you had your draft you really worked on them from there. Your final pomes seem like they have much more thought put into them. Good Job!

  3. sf70355 Says:

    I never thought about using my alarm clock as one of my objects. I definitely couldn’t live without my alarm clock either. Great poems 🙂

  4. mlehowl Says:

    I love your poems. Your revised poems seem to roll off the tongue easier. I like the word shimmers in your ipod poem. Good job Karen!


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